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This is Thursday, by Monday next, this guy, whoever he is, will have a name and an entry in the cast page. I don’t know what either of those will be at this point, but it will happen.
Coldreaver mentioned it the other day, and it was something I should have cottoned too sooner, but Mouse has a fairly predictable arc each storyline. Show up, someone gets all moony-eyed over her, something (typically bad,) happens. I’d like to apologize for that kind of lazy story-telling. When I was developing her character in notes and doodles, way back in the beginning, there were three major events I wanted to happen to Mouse, and I know how her story ends. It’s going to take us ten years to get there, but I know where there is. But it could be a very long ten years if this is all that happens to her. It isn’t, I’ve got other events in mind, but, in the harsh light of critical examination, things are going to need to be switched around so that it’s a believable arc, and not a last minute switcheroo.
So, my hat is off in thanks to you, Coldreaver.
Uh-ho. What happens when mouse wants to punch someone’s face in the presence of her golem? I think Lupa knows, and some yet-to-be-named guy may be about to find out.
Say, what was dental coverage like for a random backwood villager back in the middle-ages? No reason for asking…
Lupa got punched not because Mouse wanted to punch her, but because Merunga ordered Mouse to order her golem to subdue Lupa, which is kind of confusing. When Mouse WANTS someone punched, that’s a whole different thing.
And I’d say not very good, no one is going to want to date this guy for his looks.
Well, thank you very much, but please don’t change your story or style on my account. You have been doing an awesome job so far with no laziness that I can see.
Honestly, Mouse’s position is pretty realistic: She is that sole plain or vulnerable figure, surrounded by a parade of monsters. Even Merunga, who might look normal and is surely attractive, exudes an aura of power that would chill the ardor of even the brashest fools.
With that in mind, Mouse is the most approachable of these newcomers, all of whom essentially fit the social role of vagrant. That means she’s the image of an easy “mark,” without any lasting consequences for someone who wants to take advantage of her. Of course, appearances can be deceiving, especially when one has a golem at their beck and call (and a powerful, possibly immortal witch / demi-goddess watching over them)!
Thanks again, and keep up the good work!
The major story beats won’t change, but more care will go into portraying Mouse as an actual person, I don’t want her to become a porcelain doll, and every story an exploration of preventing harm from coming to her. And I do hope she serves as that kind of point-of-view character that you can relate to, but don’t get sick of.